I couldn't wait so here's the second installment in what I hope to be an extended series.
This is a somewhat-hardcore instrumental, just guitar and (beatcraft) drums.
Feedback appreciated!

http://soundcloud.com/alec_stewart/analoginstumental

It's decent. Not very original yet, but that might change with the vocals.
But originality is something a lot of hardcore/post hardcore/metalcore etc. bands struggle with.

The drums sounds like shit. Not what they play, but how they sound. I don't know if EZDrummer would sound better, you might wanna check it out.

The guitar sound needs more definition IMO.

Your break at about 0:35 sounds a bit weird..

I'm a negative person so i point out the negative stuff. I'll let others give you feedback on the positive

No i really do appreciate it, this kind of feedback is way more valuable than empty praise. And I actually totally agree with everything you said, I just havn't gotten around to fixing that stuff yet. I wrote it and recorded it in the same day, i wanted to get it down so i could remember. I tried EZDrummer, but I prefer beatcraft. I did the drums at school and i had forgotten to put the drum sound packs on my comp so yeah they do sound like shit. As for the guitar definition, its improved a lot since i recorded it but do you have any suggestions as to how to further it?
Its funny you should mention the break at 0:35. that is literally just an improv riff that i decided to keep.

Thank you so much your criticism actually makes me want to fix those things!